What's your favorite thing to do whenever the weather is so hot?
I think you know it already,
My favorite thing is it = eating ice cream.
when I eat ice cream,
my whole body is cool.
and I like to eat bingsu too.
It's cooler than ice cream.
and it's home-made.
So it's very healthy.
My mother said"Please don't eat ice cream.
You will eat home-made = homemade bingsu.
and I like it too.
But it's not very sweet.
My mother doesn't like that.
But I like that very much.
This summer is so long!

Great job! ^_^