제 목   a party you attended    상 태  
   작성자   dreamj007    등록일   2016-11-11
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  My friend, Yoon’s wedding ceremony without a doubt would have to be the party I attended recently. He is 36 years old the same age as me currently working as a middle school P.E teacher in JEJU island. He has been working there for the past 6years and We have known each other since middle school. The wedding ceremony was held last weekend in the hotel where is located in the center of my city. And this hotel has a lot of luxurious decorations and retaining a quaint atmosphere. A number of people like friends, relatives and colleagues participated in the wedding ceremony. There are a lot of events such as gala performances, taking pictures and parent’s congratulations. After the ceremony, we had a great dinner with all guests. There are diverse delicious foods and refreshments which are very exotic and mouth-watering. And at that time, I met old friends and had a lot of conversations with them. I felt grateful about the wedding ceremony for a couple of reasons. The party was not only a happy memory but a quality time as well. When I got an invitation from my friend I was so pleasant and happy. So I have expected the party because of spectacular events and delicious foods. And the one thing that I like most is a good chance to meet my old friends because I can keep in touch with them throughout the event. I still remember the first time to meet my old friends. At that time, I didn’t notice them because we didn’t meet for long time ever since I graduate high school.
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My friend, Yoon’s wedding ceremony without a doubt would have to be the party I attended recently. = My friend, Yoon’s wedding ceremony is one of the most recent parties I've attended.

He is 36 years old the same age as me currently working as a middle school P.E teacher in JEJU island. He has been working there for the past 6 years and We have known each other since middle school.
 
The wedding ceremony was held last weekend in the hotel where is located in the center of my city. = The wedding ceremony was held last weekend in a hotel located in the center of my city. And this hotel has a lot of luxurious decorations and retaining a quaint atmosphere. = And this hotel has a lot of luxurious decorations, retaining a quaint atmosphere.


A number of people like friends, relatives and colleagues participated in the wedding ceremony. There are a lot of events such as gala performances, taking pictures and parent’s congratulations. = (You might need to change the "parent's congralutlations" part) After the ceremony, we had a great dinner with all (the) guests. There are diverse delicious foods and refreshments which are very exotic and mouth-watering. And at that time, I met old friends and had a lot of conversations with them.

I felt grateful about the wedding ceremony for a couple of reasons.
The party was not only a happy memory but a quality time as well. When I got an invitation from my friend I was so pleasant and happy. = When I got an invitation from my friend I was so pleased and happy. So I have expected the party because of spectacular events and delicious foods. = (I'm not sure what this means) And the one thing that I like most is a good chance to meet my old friends because I can keep in touch with them throughout the event. = And the one thing that I like the most is a good chance to meet my old friends because I was able to catch up with them throughout the event.

I still remember the first time to meet my old friends. = (How do you meet your old friends for the first time? Might as well change this) At that time, I didn’t notice them because we didn’t meet for long time ever since I graduate high school. = At that time, I didn’t notice them immediately because I haven't seen them since I graduated in high school.
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