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   작성자   dreamj007    등록일   2016-11-23
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  J.S. PARK is one of my most favorate creative persons who has influenced me. He is I think 36 years old. He is a retired footballer who is one of the representative players in KOREA. He had been playing football for the past 25 years before he retired in 2014. He is in United Kingdom and has been actively representing as an honorary ambassador for the Manchester United. He was the first football player in the Manchester United as the Korean and the first Asian football player to captain a Premier League team. He reached the most offense points recorded among Koreans on the English Premier League so most of Koreans are most proud of him as a soccer player. There are a couple of reasons why he has influenced me. He is not only honest but an icon of endeavor as well. He was not outstanding football player from childhood but he had thought his future’s appearance as a Premier League footballer and endured hard and difficult training and then finally, he was selected a member of the national soccer team of KOREA In 2002. These efforts impressed me and made an impact on my daily life, especially, studying English and conducting dissertation. I still remember when I was a child I was interested in soccer and used to play it once or twice a week with my friends. One day, I received a book from my friend related to J.S. PARK’s football life. I read the book, after that I have been a huge fan of him ever since.
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J.S. PARK is one of my most favorate creative persons who has influenced me.

He is I think 36 years old. He is a retired footballer who is one of the representative players in KOREA. (Is it one of the representative players in Korea or of Korea?)
He had been playing football for the past 25 years before he retired in 2014.

He is in United Kingdom and has been actively representing as an honorary ambassador for the Manchester United.
He was the first football player in the Manchester United as the Korean and the first Asian football player to captain a Premier League team. = He was the first Korean football player in Manchester United and the first Asian football player to captain a Premier League team. He reached the most offense points recorded among Koreans on the English Premier League so most of Koreans are most proud of him as a soccer player. = He reached the most number of offense points recorded among Koreans on the English Premier League so most of Koreans proud of him as a soccer player.

There are a couple of reasons why he has influenced me.
He is not only honest but an icon of endeavor as well. He was not outstanding football player from childhood but he had thought his future’s appearance as a Premier League footballer and endured hard and difficult training and then finally, he was selected a member of the national soccer team of KOREA In 2002. =  He was not an outstanding football player when he was young. (but he had thought his future’s appearance as a Premier League footballer) = (I'm not sure what this means) He endured hard and difficult training and then finally, he got selected as a member of the national soccer team of KOREA in 2002. These efforts impressed me and made an impact on my daily life, especially, in studying English and conducting dissertation.

I still remember when I was a child, I was interested in soccer and used to play it once or twice a week with my friends. One day, I received a book from my friend related to J.S. PARK’s football life. I read the book, after that I have been a huge fan of him ever since.
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