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Topic - Some young people learn useful skills by electric and computer games.

Others think that electronis and computer games are waste of time. = Others think that electronic and computer games are waste of time. 

 To waht extent do you agree or disagree? =  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views about whether electronic and computer games could benefit for young generation. While some people believe that it is helpful for them to obtain special skill. I agree with thoes who believe that it could be detrimental effects to young people.

In recent year, there are various type of electronic metarials such as smart phone and computer which normally most people have.= In recent years, there are various types of electronic materials such as smart phones and computers which normally most people have.

Developed technical stuff makes our life more convenient compared to in te past. = Developed technical stuff makes our life more convenient compared in the past.

Firstly, particulary young people are good at using their own phone or computer so it is quite easy for them to search lots of informations that they would like to know also many people share their idea or information on the internet so even if someone who need to help or advice, they could solve their problems themselves by seeking informations.  = Firstly, young people are particulary good at using their own phones or computers so it is quite easy for them to search much information that they would like to know; also many people share their ideas or information on the internet so even if someone needs help or advice, they could solve their problems themselves by seeking information. 

Secondly, It is seen to be good medium that people would get along easily. for example, by using the phone, people may keep it touch with their friends or family frequently to make bonding each other as well as sharing their habit like computer games, they become more closer. = Secondly, it seems to be a good medium for people to get along easily. For example, by using phones, people may keep it touch with their friends or family frequently to bond with each other as well as to share hobbies like computer games, they become closer.